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26 August 2007 @ 05:58 pm
On His Way  
Title: On His Way
Fandom: BBM
Disclaimer: Not my characters, I make no money
Rating: G
Summary: A pre-reunion canon drabble.

On His Way

Ennis stopped to peer out the window over the T.V. The weather was overcast and cool, but turning. He was comforted by the certainty that somewhere along the dark asphalt lifelines of the West, the roads that started at his apartment door and led on seemingly forever, was Jack. He was already on his way. He was on his way home.
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Current Location: St. Paul, MN
Current Music: The Wedding Singer
jennastsjennasts on August 26th, 2007 07:07 pm (UTC)
Jess, lovely! but I was messed up by the typo of the word "on." Isn't "no" supposed to be "on?" Or maybe the word "along" would be more appropriate? It's a tricky phrase that I'm not sure I entirely understand. Anyway, I think you should fix the typo so nobody else is tripped up as I was. Then delete this comment!
Bloody Jack Flint: Ennis Reunion Hushrhye on August 26th, 2007 07:13 pm (UTC)
As if I want to delete your comment! Thanks so much for reading this little tiny piece. I'm going to edit that sentence right now; I think I know a way to make it read more clearly. But thank you a million for reading!
phoebephoebe2680 on August 26th, 2007 07:20 pm (UTC)
*sigh* Loved it, loved it, loved it. Thank you!
sweetjesweetje on August 26th, 2007 08:32 pm (UTC)
I love that last sentence. "He was already on his way home." What an appropriate ending.

This was a very nice piece. It may have been short, but I really got into it. : )

judy_blue_catjudy_blue_cat on August 26th, 2007 09:09 pm (UTC)
Should "lead" be "led"? Past tense?
Bloody Jack Flintrhye on August 26th, 2007 09:26 pm (UTC)
Ha, you got me on another typo! Teach me not to use a beta. I read "lead" as "led", but that's probably because I'm a scientist? Thanks for reading!
ohiomyownohiomyown on August 26th, 2007 09:46 pm (UTC)
1000 Times
I love this little piece, and I believe it should be 1000 times longer, that's my hope.

I'm just going to ask for more! More, of everything you write. It's your job to ignore me, and go work on the stories that you favor. I'll love it, no matter which ones you bestow upon us.

lizbirdlizbird on August 26th, 2007 11:55 pm (UTC)
Very nice. I can feel the anticipation.
my_lil_darlin: wyoming roadmy_lil_darlin on August 27th, 2007 10:33 am (UTC)

Sweet. And I loved your icon, going along with it, Ennis's face as he spied Jack outside. Home at last...
lolitaraylolitaray on August 27th, 2007 08:06 pm (UTC)
That was really lovely. Ennis is anticipating Jack, the last line summed it up perfectly. :)
testa_duratesta_dura on August 28th, 2007 08:23 am (UTC)
I love this piece so much, Jess. I want to memorize it. There's a magical duality to the last line to me - HE could be both of them Jack was on his was to Ennis therefore Ennis was on his way "home" since his heart was with Jack - that's where his home was. Lovely.